Arguement Against Marijuana Goes up in Smoke (A)

7 specific things as to why I think It is an A paper
1.) It clearly provides the argument in the thesis and then proceeds to support the argument a quote from President Carter, an authoritative figure in America
2.) The paper provides historical information and background knowledge of marijuana and supports both by citing the World Drug Report
3.) The paper has a consistent flow and transitions well from topic to topic as mentioned at the end of the thesis
4.) The paragraphs aren't lengthy because of short sentence structure which allows the reader to get straight to the point while remembering all the information. The paragraph on marijuana addiction does this very well
5.) The paper is written in a style where it's easy to read and concise for younger readers but is appealing to the same audience of middle aged conservatives that Healy was
6.) The paper is very very specific and it's not vague at all about anything
7.) Very clear logic as well as ethos but has a subtle appeal to our emotions with pathos because of the Good it could do in our society

5 things I could use in my paper
1.) The specificity really helps the paper not only seem logical but credible and authoritative on the subject
2.)The paper flows well together by presenting the flaws of Healy's argument and then rebutting them in the same paragraph
3.) Now that we have learned more about style, I could try to adopt the same short and simple sentence structure
4.) The way the thesis and conclusion tie the paper together into one was very well done and helps the paper be more clear
5.) I would have to keep in mind that when I'm using rhetorical appeals that I remember the audience I'm writing to

Obesity as a topic

Josh this is for you because I didn't post it yesterday but I will also put the correctly cited annotated sources tonight. For my topic I'm going to do corporate fast food chains ( if needed to be more specific i could just do mcdonalds) Corporate Fast Food Chains are Bad because there is a direct link between them and the rising obesity in this country which leads to a larger cultural claim that there has been a shift in our societies traditional morals because we now favor convenience over hard work even if that work is what is keeping us healthy

Gentleman Gaga

A big point made about lady gaga is that she is, in my own words, a liar. She claims to be the defender of transgendered peoples, drag queens, and anyone of the sort but actually she doesn't believe it herself. Many people think that because she had a huge transition into fame, she is only acting the way she is to win over an audience and make money. In fact the article posted on Angel mentions how Gaga is trying to imitate other artists such as madonna, and elton john. They say she isn't original, and she is just posing as this persona to change the way sex is viewed in modern society, which is why her music videos are so strange and unique. I think that when dealing with something so unethical and illogical in my opinion the only way you can win over an audience when debating against Gaga is to use emotion. By revealing hidden personalities and quirks that she has, as much as that adds to ethos, it also makes the reader feel like the person is just a bad person, not someone who should be running the pop scene as a sex icon.

Three Topics and Freewriting

Three Topics I would be interested in would be Search Engines and how they are good and help society benefit from increased information sharing, T.V. shows such as true blood where taboo subjects are made out to be not so controversial which is also good and fast food chains and how they relate to the bigger problem of obesity which is bad. For the sake of time I am only going to free write about fast food. It's a big deal to me because I used to eat fast food all the time and I finally gave it up and lost a lot of weight. It was hard but I still did it. Which is why obesity, obese not fat, disgusts me. I believe in the my body is a temple mind set and if someone isn't willing to treat themselves right for the sake of themselves or society then maybe we should take action against the root of it all, fast food chains. I'm so surprised how people react to obesity like it's normal even if the person doesn't have anything wrong with them genetically or is living in a society where super models are so skinny and have such a big impact on culture. To make it even worse there are T.V. shows now about and for really really fat people which is enabling them to eat mcdonalds three times a day for breakfast lunch and dinner. It just goes to show how society values convenience over their own health

Narrative Peer Review Review

I had Eli as my partner again for this review which I didn't think was necessarily a bad thing. Since I had him as a partner before I knew a little bit about how he would react and what he was looking for, so when i received less criticisms than the time before I knew that my writing was better. This feeling of confidence I had from the review allowed me to write a better paper with more passion for it instead of thinking that my paper was a piece of trash. Also Eli usually writes better papers than me so if he thinks it's good maybe that reflects a potential for having a higher grade on my memoir paper

Narrative Reading Response - Eating Dinner

Tonight we sat down at our, hard, cold, and unused dining room table to eat together as a family. I wasn't too keen on the family part, but I was almost starving so I was willing to sit down. I decided to not go out to eat wings at Kildare's because my mother was making spaghetti, and I love her spaghetti. I was down in the basement in my room, in the dark, trying not to get a headache from staring at my T.V. for the past four hours. That's when it hit me. The aroma of my moms spaghetti sauce intertwined with garlic bread had swiftly carried itself down the stairs and through my door as if it were some sort of ghostly apparition. It seemed to some how compel my body to walk upstairs in an almost dream like state. There it was in the sink with steam rising off of it. My line of sight was quickly averted to the near by pan of sauce still bubbling and sizzling with every burst. I scooped a decent weight of spaghetti onto my plate and covered it with sauce and sprinkled it with Parmesan cheese and then garnished the plate with garlic bread. It was so delicious but I almost didn't taste it at all as I inhaled the noodles into my mouth. I would have to say, besides twirling the spaghetti on my fork, having the spaghetti smack my lips as I sucked the noodles into my mouth and licking the residual sauce off my lips, was undoubtedly the best part of my meal. Finishing up with garlic bread was an awesome change of pace, changing textures from something so soft to a hard yet subtle crunch. To wash it all down was my favorite drink Snapple Ice Tea. It all was so refreshing, that I hadn't had time to pay attention to anything else besides my food. I couldn't help feel bad for my mother who worked so hard to make, because I didn't make conversation or eye contact for that matter. The overwhelming satisfaction from the meal though was enough to make me forget how bad I felt. I got up from the table, turned and smiled to my mother, and proceeded to return to my hole until she would stomp for dinner next time.

Narative Reading Response

1.) I think the biggest noticeable difference between the narratives and the papers we have been writing is the personal tone they take. In high school all my teachers told us that conceptually and grammatically it is bad to write a paper around yourself. To focus so much on yourself and by using the words "i" and "me", you would be writing a bad paper. The use of imagery is also different. Instead of describing something, you can use the text of flashbacks to make the reader feel something.

2.) In Heroes will Drown I think the purpose of the paper was to inform the audience about the need to accept life for what it is, accept yourself for who you are. I think that personal memoirs and reflections such as this can be interpreted in different ways. I think that its a story of suppression, and being put in your place by the world. This is because of the professor's quote of the most dangerous thing is trying to be a hero. I can infer from this then that the audience is supposed to be those who are just finding themselves, probably older teenagers and younger people in their twenties. people older than that can still relate because anyone who has realized how life will treat you can relate to this coming of rationalization story.

Definition Peer Review

This peer review wasn't as helpful as the last peer review at Irving's just because I think having multiple people comment on your paper can give you more views and insights as to why your paper is bad. Also the out of class time that irving's allowed us to have was beneficial. Someone might pick up on stylistic errors while another contextual errors. I actually thought this week in class was more beneficial than the peer review. I don't know if it was because Josh did a good job at clearing up what the heck the paper was supposed to actually be or if it was because of the way he taught the style and sentence structure. I found it way easier to write a coherent paper that flows with clear and concise sentences after the in class discussion. I think it would be more beneficial during the peer review to have yourself read over the paper now that we are more knowledgeable, during class, and then if we have time left after we finish have a peer or two read it and see if they have anything to add.

Definition Topic

Absolute freedom does not exist within the real world.

Defining Freedom

1.) the OED definition of freedom is to be free from, servitude, inhibition, constraint. To have liberty of action, to act without restraint.

2.) Historically freedom has been a term used when one becomes free of servitude whether that be as a slave or under the reign of tyrannical king. Freedom has been a symbol of hope for those who wish to have the liberty of making decision of their own free will.

3.) Freedom for the purpose of my paper is not only physical freedom but more importantly mental freedom. I will explain how you are never free from constraints on both, in society, nature, and within ones self.

Vanity, Thy Name is Metrosexual Answers

1.) Hackbarth defines metrosexual as a man who seem stereotypically gay except for his sexual orientation. She uses, "a straight man who styles his hair with three different products" and "loves clothes and the very act for shopping for them" as example for what a metrosexual is. The larger argument is that although metrosexuals are more accepting of gay men, and that is a good thing, they are hard to distinguish from actual gay men when women are looking for a date.

2.) Some people think being metrosexual is a way of life, whether or not its living for love or for the love of designer jeans, where Hackbarth thinks that metrosexuality is actually an indicator of how far removed from real life we are. She makes this point known by exposing what caused these men to be metrosexual and what effect that has left on society in general.

3.) I thought that Hackbarth used a comedic and satirical tone throughout the paper describing the metrosexual man.She does this to explain who and what a real man is. This leads me to believe that her audience is female and that like her are fed up with this type of man. They are probably women who also feel down on their luck with love and are sick of meeting the metrosexual man.

Pier Review Review

I found the peer review at Irving’s very helpful, not because of the atmosphere but because of the criticisms. At times the criticisms seemed harsh but that’s only because what was being criticized need more attention and you guys were just trying to help me understand the concepts behind writing a rebuttal. I also liked how Josh commented on it too because my peers can be a little too nice sometimes, but having two to three people read my paper gave me different perspectives on what was wrong.  I guess the biggest problem with my paper was how vague it was with no specific quotes or examples from the book so it killed my ethos by making me look like I was attacking Packham’s character, in turn losing my audience. I was able to fix a lot through my paper by reworking sentence structures to make more, clear and concise points so the paper wasn’t as confusing or awkward to read. The flow of the paper I believe is much better now but I still found the pt-rebuttal-counterpt hard to do because I feel like if I wanted to I could I could have written a paper on just one of his pts yet I had to instead argue against about four to five of his pts. I think because of the review my paper comes across better when read but I’m still not all that confident if I was able to argue well enough my pts.

Nanotechnology... I mean Molecular Manufacturing

1.) The main point of contention between Smalley and Drexler is whether or not nanobots can exist in the physical world and whether or not they can practically manufacture or molecularly assemble macroscopic objects.

2.) Besides their scientific reputations being at stake both are risking the possible future of Nano Technology. Smalley by Drexler's idea of Nano Mechanical Factories with Nano Assemblers and spreading fear of autonomous Nanobots that can communicate and spread like a new disease prevents potential funding for Nanotechnologies and jeopardizes current funding.

3.) Drexler Challenged Smalley's assumption that Nanobots would have "fat" and "sticky" fingers and provided a counter arguement against the need for enzymes and biological chemistry with his theory of mechanosynthesis. Smalley provided reasons as to why Drexler's reasoning was wrong and notes that Drexler has not yet given a well enough explanation for how to create and stabalize molecular bonds between atoms stating that Drexler is living in a world where the laws of chemistry do not apply.

4.) Smalley added to his ethos and tried winning the audience by agreeing with Drexler numerous times while all Drexler had to do was mention he received his Ph.D from MIT, coined the phrase "Nano Technology", and has been a leading authority on such since the 1980's, since which, he has written many books and articles on the subject.

5.) Smalley in his article "Nano Fallacies" actually used the slippery slope fallacy where he proposed the creation of self-replication nanobots would lead to the end of the world as we know it. It is a fallacy because Nanobots are not inevitably the cause of the end of the world, it is only a possibility. Drexler although provides a lengthy and scientific explanation as a rebuttal uses a logical fallacy in doing so. Just because Drexler uses scientific jargon to mask the fact that he is oversimplifying the facts does not mean he is providing a well thought out argument.

6.) I think Drexler provided a righteous smack down on Smalley. For a while both made good points and were toe to toe but as Drexler kept his composure and gave clear and concise points, Smalley rejects the ideas because they are from a scientific field unknown to him and lashes out on Drexler personally than attacking his argument. Drexler's thing about quoting a respected scientist (Smalley) was also really brilliant, for it made Smalley look like a Jerk.

Message to Mothership

Part 1: Rhetorical Analysis on "Armchair Warlords and Robot Hordes" by Paul Marks

Part 2:

Jackson's points on the context of Barbara Jordan

1.) Jordan was a member of a political party opposite Nixon and had to prove she had no bias

2.) Jordan was also from Texas and fairly new to congress so she had to earn their trust which is why she had to present herself as fair, knowledgeable, and intellectually mature

3.) Jordan is also an African American which influences how she, the rhetor, views the constitution
       

Jackson's points on the text of Barbara Jordan

1.) She was not just addressing the House Judiciary Committee but made sure that she gave a more open and public speech to appeal to a larger audience

2.) After gaining the audience's trust by using ethos she reminds the audience of the fact that they are potential victims and uses powerful words that demonize Nixon as a tyrannical president swollen with power

3.) Jordan used statements found in the constitution, uses evidence from state Constitutional Conventions, and quotes a supreme court Justice to give her more credit and create a definition of impeachment for her audience

Contextual and Textual Observations of Barbara Jordan's Speech not Addressed by Jackson

         
Contextual-Jordan mentions all congress has to do such as tax reform, health insurance, housing, environmental protection, and mass transportation, all of which remind the audience of the hardships in the U.S. during this time and invoking in them both emotion and the logical reasoning that they should impeach Nixon
       
Textual-Jordan does not only quote Madison and others but name drops and tells stories to build her credibility(ethos)

Tyler Roth first writing prompt

Was anybody else as excited as I was to see Josh walk in the classroom? I was fearful that we might have had a putrid, old, monotonous, and uptight teacher. I don’t feel very good about my writing but I don’t feel bad about it either. My favorite kind of writing is the writing where you have no limitations because then you are able to actually say what you are thinking. When you write like this on a blog or for a friend I feel like more people can relate and you have more fun while you are writing it yourself. In writing classes before, I kind of just coasted by because I knew all of my teachers which in turn made it easier to get away with turning papers in late and fooling around in class. It was ok with me though because we always focused on spelling and grammar and those two things just aren’t very important to me. In English 15 I’m looking forward to learning about different writing styles because I have always wanted to learn how to make my writing more persuasive to the audience I’m trying to appeal to.